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Sophia Takal

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I've listed this article for peer review because that's what you do

Thanks, TheWarOfArt (talk) 20:13, 3 September 2014 (UTC)  Done

This article needs an awful lot of work and isn't anywhere near 'Good Article' standard, I'm afraid.

• The content is minimal:
  • I'm sure a lot more happened in her 'Early life' than being born in Montclair, New Jersey? This section needs to be expanded.
  • "Takal has worked on and starred in numerous independent films, some associated with the mumblecore movemement": maybe mentioning some of the films in which she was involved in the body of the article as well as the lead would be an idea? A brief description of the 'mumblecore movement' perhaps?
  • You mention her first directing effort, but don't mention if there are any more or if this is the only such one to date.
• Layout:
  • Perhaps having 'Early life' as a subheading under 'Personal'?
  • A filmography section would be useful, listing the projects she has been involved in as an actress and director. See Cate Blanchett#Filmography.
  • If she has won any awards, an 'Awards' section could be included.
• You should probably include an infobox, as per most other biography pages, see Sofia Coppola for an example. Sotakeit (talk) 14:59, 22 September 2014 (UTC)